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Related: Culture Forums, Support ForumsA Nerd Tried Rewriting '50 Shades Of Grey' And It's Better Than The Real Thing
I haven't read the book or seen the movie so wouldn't know about 'better' but my SWAG is that this is a lot funnier. (I know it's from last year but I just ran across it and thought it might still be worth sharing).
http://distractify.com/humor/2016/04/25/shades-of-nerd
One of the Tweets, more at the above link...
https://mobile.twitter.com/50NerdsofGrey/status/715311539834785792
>>'I'm all yours tonight!' she cried, 'Do something to me you'd never normally dare do to a woman!'
'All right' he said, and made eye contact.<<
Eta... Okay... I give up. Would someone please tell me what I'm doing wrong? The Tweet isn't showing so it's not just going to the Tweets page and C&P of its url?
lunatica
(53,410 posts)That's priceless!
TexasBushwhacker
(20,165 posts)Horrible writing. Here are some examples.
https://www.buzzfeed.com/alanwhite/13-powerfully-erotic-lines-from-50-shades-of-grey?utm_term=.ew6RAQxGV#.pigJGqYkL
hatrack
(59,583 posts)WePurrsevere
(24,259 posts)I'd say Shades was more, No Behinds Left Behind.
WePurrsevere
(24,259 posts)and that was published by a main publishing company? It sounded rather abusive and misogynistic from all that I'd heard previously so as a past victim of abuse I skipped it. Now I'm even happier that I did.
One of my 'guilty pleasures' to de-stress is reading an occasional steamy romance and I've seen self published by new writers with MUCH better sex scenes described than what I just read.
TexasBushwhacker
(20,165 posts)After it sold a bunch of copies it was picked up by Vintage Books. I suppose some people think it's so bad it's good, but I think it's just bad.
Oh, here's the famous tampon scene that didn't make it into the movie.
"His breathing is ragged, matching mine.
When did you start your period, Anastasia? he asks out of the blue, gazing down at me.
Err
yesterday, I mumble in my highly aroused state.
Good. He releases me and turns me around.
Hold on to the sink, he orders and pulls my hips back again, like he did in the playroom, so Im bending down.
He reaches between my legs and pulls on the blue string
what! And
a gently pulls my tampon out and tosses it into the nearby toilet. Holy fuck. Sweet mother of all
Jeez. And then hes inside me
ah! Skin against skin
moving slowly at first
easily, testing me, pushing me
oh my. I grip on to the sink, panting, forcing myself back on him, feeling him inside me. Oh the sweet agony
his hands clasp my hips. He sets a punishing rhythm in, out, and he reaches around and finds my clitoris, massaging me
oh jeez. I can feel myself quicken.
Thats right, baby, he rasps as he grinds into me, angling his hips, and its enough to send me flying, flying high.
Whoa
and I come, loudly, gripping for dear life onto the sink as I spiral down through my orgasm, everything spinning and clenching at once. He follows, clasping me tightly, his front on my back as he climaxes and calls my name like its a litany or a prayer.
Oh, Ana! His breathing is ragged in my ear, in perfect synergy with mine. Oh, baby, will I ever get enough of you? he whispers.
Will it always be like this? So overwhelming, so all-consuming, so bewildering and beguiling. I wanted to talk, but now Im [
]"
The writer's net worth is estimated to be $60 Million. Oh the humanity .....
WePurrsevere
(24,259 posts)Maybe it's time get those books I have in my head down in print and self published. I don't think I could do much worse than that.
TexasBushwhacker
(20,165 posts)WePurrsevere
(24,259 posts)I've seen excellent work done. I hadn't heard about Deepak Chopra starting that way.
TexasBushwhacker
(20,165 posts)The Martian was self published. And I messed up about Chopra. I must have been thinking of someone else.