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Cirque du So-What

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2. Only slightly ambiguous

Reply to Laura PourMeADrink (Original post)

Sat May 25, 2019, 08:57 AM

May 2019

The title makes it clear that the family's home is in LA, however, where it says 'Louisiana family.' This makes the 'home in southern Oregon' phrase invalid.

I suggest...

"A Louisiana family dreams up an idyllic outdoor retreat in Southern Oregon, 2,600 miles away from home."

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Grammar police [View all] Laura PourMeADrink May 2019 OP

Grammar looks ok to me, but you should leave my Grammar alone. And my Grampar too! abqtommy May 2019 #1

Only slightly ambiguous Cirque du So-What May 2019 #2

Yes, perfect way to fix. Think its Laura PourMeADrink May 2019 #3

Yep. Technically accurate... Cirque du So-What May 2019 #4

Most important thing I'll do today, haha..just wrote Laura PourMeADrink May 2019 #5

I'd just scratch "from home." Gidney N Cloyd May 2019 #6