Please critique my DSM T-Shirt design

[iconoclastNYC]

I'm thinking about making a tshirt on cafe press. I haven't liked what I've seen out there so far.

What do you think?



Link to view/purchase : http://www.cafepress.com/left_iconoclast

[a kennedy]

1. I spose Minutes is to long, right???

[flvegan]

2. "Truly" not truely. Sorry to nitpick.

[1monster]

3. Change the "Memo" to "Minutes" and you've got a winner.

[iconoclastNYC]

11. I really don't see the big difference.

The media is using MEMO and i think consistency trumps the marginal difference in the framing.

[rzemanfl]

4. Need to see it wet and on a woman to tell. Just kidding, nice

job.

[NYPagan]

10. Not nice!

No cookies for you!

[rzemanfl]

15. Maybe some devil's food cake? n/t

[SlavesandBulldozers]

5. i wouldn't put the last additional sentence in

i would let the DSM sit and ruminate without any additions. it is fine on its own, without any help or guidance - you dont want your audience to feel lectured - after all - everybody knows that lying is bad.

[babylonsister]

6. Maybe add a website address for those

who might be living under a rock? :shrug:

[iconoclastNYC]

13. i don't like doing that

i think it cluters the design. if people don't know they'll ask i think. or they can google it.

[RobertSeattle]

7. Idea - "What part of 'Facts were being fixed' don't you understand?"

[LiberalEsto]

8. When I see DSM, I think, Diagnostic Statistical Manual

sorry, can't help it.

I'm hoping to go downtown to DC for the 5 pm rally

and thinking of making a sign saying:

"Bush,
do you even really know what TRUTH is?"

[freeplessinseattle]

14. LOL, me too! can't help it, but guess it's appropiate, both deal

with mental disturbances.

[reBel_gyrl]

9. AWESOME shirt..

I would leave out "to us" at the end ("If we allow our leaders to lie, we are not truly free.") because they didn't only lie to us, but to the world. And then I'd buy two. Great idea!

[iconoclastNYC]

12. Good idea. I'll change it.