khashka
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Wed Oct-25-06 12:22 PM
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I've given up on my HT poem |
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It'll take thought and work.... and I think best when I don't think.
So I'm redoing my poem Sarah.... a woman I spent a night with. Before you get the wrong idea, nothing happened. We just held each other. I'm trying to think just how she smelled and how it felt to have her arms around me. Eventually I'll get it... but if you guys could give me some help....
No names, just how you felt.
Khash.
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hfojvt
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Wed Oct-25-06 12:40 PM
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1. "Sarah, Sarah. Storms are brewing in your eyes |
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Sarah. Sarah. No time is a good time for good-bye."
That's pure poetry.
You mean everybody doesn't like Starship?
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:hi: It's been a while.
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Wed Oct-25-06 12:44 PM
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Edited on Wed Oct-25-06 12:48 PM by wildhorses
abiding love safe, secure spreading warmth surrounding me upholding me eternity
check your PM, thanks
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Thu Oct-26-06 01:23 AM
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How beautiful this is!
Thank you so much.......:hug:
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Thu Oct-26-06 01:30 AM
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Edited on Thu Oct-26-06 01:49 AM by quantessd
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Thu Oct-26-06 02:16 AM
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5. well 'how' is a question |
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so maybe you could work around that theme somehow...maybe asking questions...
kind of like how EBB started that sonnet with 'how do i love thee'
instead maybe just the hows of the physical sensation.
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