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Wed Apr-30-08 07:05 AM
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The RetroLounge Daily Poem Thread (Wed 4/30/2008) |
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The Argument
After the argument, all things were strange. They stood divided by their eloquence Which had surprised them after so much silence. Now there were real things to rearrange. Words betokened deeds, but they were both Lightened briefly, and they were inclined To be kind as sometimes strangers can be kind. It was as if, out of the undergrowth, They stepped into a clearing and the sun, Machetes still in hand. Something was done, But how they did not fully realize. Something was beginning. Something would stem And branch from this one moment. Something made Them both look up into each other's eyes Because they both were suddenly afraid And there was no one now to comfort them.
A.E. Stallings
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Wed Apr-30-08 07:56 AM
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:08 PM
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Wed Apr-30-08 08:53 AM
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It was as if, out of the undergrowth, They stepped into a clearing and the sun, Machetes still in hand. Something was done, But how they did not fully realize.
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:09 PM
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:wow:
I can't even tell you...
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:10 PM
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Describes it perfectly...
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:13 PM
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Wed Apr-30-08 10:29 AM
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5. Intense little poem. Very well crafted in a subtle way. Interesting rhyme scheme: |
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:14 PM
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11. A little inversion of the Sonnet? |
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Wed Apr-30-08 11:51 AM
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In a compelling way, of course.
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Wed Apr-30-08 05:14 PM
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Wow...
A poem as universal truth...
...Something was done, But how they did not fully realize. Something was beginning. Something would stem And branch from this one moment...
Thank you...
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