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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 04:40 PM
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Ok... I wrote the poem
It started out as an erotic poem, but then I drifted off! lol

That's pretty sad. When a person can't even keep on topic... in their own poem. sigh.

"Knowing"

With your kiss
you can never leave

torrents of passion
flow

Your touch
gently
on my face

I know

The beginning
and the end...
the flurry in between
Is it really
as it seems?

So I wonder
from time to time
how one knows
when it's the one

The one who moves
the spirit, the heart,
the soul
And the sun...
the sun
was so warm

many miles away

The room fell silent
after our kisses,
the laughter
and play

We never really know
The best we can hope for
is to feel...
to feel it both ways
given and taken

looking back on the
best of days.

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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 04:46 PM
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1. My dear Haole Girl!
I like this a lot!

And I don't think you drifted off topic...

I see what you said as evolving...

Because love evolves...

The best thing you can do? Keep writing! Even if it's crap, writing every day gives you inspiration...

Writing allows you to explore.

And eventually you get through the crap, and come upon the really good stuff...

Keep priming that pump!

The clear, sweet water will eventually rise...

This is what I'm doing, and I'm finding the more I write, the better I like what's showing up...

:hug:
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 04:50 PM
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2. Thank you Peggy!
Practice, practice, practice. I know. Thank you so much for your inspiration! :hug:
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Strong Atheist Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:09 PM
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3. I am not into poetry by anyone at all, but I do think creativity should be
rewarded. Kick.
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:52 PM
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6. Aw
Thanks

:hi:
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Strong Atheist Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 07:29 AM
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10. You are welcome! nt.
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FarLeftRage Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:29 PM
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4. Very nice!
A kick from me...
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:52 PM
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7. Thank you
:hi:
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elshiva Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:37 PM
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5. That is a lovely poem.
:yourock: :applause:


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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 10:53 PM
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8. Thanks
:hi:
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elshiva Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:17 PM
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9. You are welcome. I love poems about kissing.
Just like the great kissing scenes in television and film, your writing is so romantic and erotic. It expresses human yearnings, love, and lust. Time is so precious. There is never enough time to savor a kiss.
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