BlueIris
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Sun Jul-19-09 11:17 AM
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The BlueIris Semi-Nightly Poetry Break, 7/19/09 |
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"What Do I Know"
Only how darkness grows less beyond this narrow window, how the sky fills with a circle of swallows who have belled the wind, with their wingbeats guided its direction.
The fog nourishes the fir ridge, the deer wakes and feeds in its cave of blackberry vines. The kitchen clock ticks its minutes, I hear the slow minuet of breath easing out of my skin and I keep on with what I know, watching from this couch.
The way weather suddenly appears on the ridge, how words float to the page like leaf shreds given over to the creek flow.
~Stephanie Van Horn
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CaliforniaPeggy
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Sun Jul-19-09 12:32 PM
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This is lovely, so full of great imagery!
I want to write like this when I grow up...
Thank you...
:hi:
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Tuesday Afternoon
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Sun Jul-19-09 02:13 PM
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matter of fact I was thinking as I read this how much it sounded like one of yours.
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CaliforniaPeggy
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Sun Jul-19-09 02:47 PM
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3. My dear Tuesday Afternoon... |
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Wow, sweetie...
Thank you...
Mine are not this polished...
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Tuesday Afternoon
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Sun Jul-19-09 02:58 PM
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4. I really don't know what that means...polished. |
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if you would have said that this one is more wordy, that I would agree.
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Sun Jul-19-09 03:18 PM
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5. This one is more wordy. |
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What I mean by polished is this poem seems to flow better, better imagery, like that.
My poems aren't as good as this poem...yet.
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Tuesday Afternoon
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Sun Jul-19-09 03:41 PM
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6. that determination is out of my league |
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I honestly don't see any diffrence in this and what you offer except this one is more wordy. Maybe, BlueIris can explain it. The "flow" to this one is no different (to me) than the way one of your flows. In fact, that is one of the reasons this one reminded me of your stuff.
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Sun Jul-19-09 03:42 PM
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Sun Jul-19-09 06:43 PM
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8. It does remind one of C-Peg's work, doesn't it? nt |
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