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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 07:54 PM
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My newest poem: Fog
it rolls over the
hills the street the cars
billowing up against the
end of day

Visibility zero

Over my
shoulder
the sun
dances against the sky

but it is losing

the fog comes on
not stopping


the landscape
disappears
nothing looks
right

I know this street
but not

tonight

the fog has
taken it




© 2010 MLC



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seaker Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 09:41 PM
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1. Perfect
for the last few days...
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:03 PM
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3. My dear seaker...
Indeed...the fog last night inspired me...

Thanks, sweetie!

:hug:
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Richardo Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 09:43 PM
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2. I really like the last nine lines
Very evocative.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:05 PM
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4. My dear Richardo!
I thank you...

I always find it amazing just how the words emerge. I never know...

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mnhtnbb Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:16 PM
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5. Very nice! I used to live in Rustic Canyon--between Santa Monica and Pacific Palisades--
and you nailed that beach fog!

:applause:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:21 PM
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6. My dear mnhtnbb!
It must have been fun, living there...

I was coming home to my little beach town last night when this fog started rolling in...

And the poem is the result.

Thank you!

:hug:
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mnhtnbb Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-09-10 12:30 PM
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9. Actually, it was hubby's house. We moved out of California in '88--three years after we married.
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NYC_SKP Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:48 PM
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7. Well!
We get fog for days, and thick.

I never thought of fog this way, cool!

I guess that's what poetry is all about... hmmm?

Happy New Year, Peg!

:party: :hug:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-08-10 10:59 PM
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8. My dear NYC_SKP!
We get it for days too, but this is about how it behaves (sometimes) as it arrives...

I'm so glad you came by, and even gladder that this showed you something new!

Thank you!

Happy New Year, sweetie!

:hug: :party:
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