Maybe my best haiku ever.

[MiddleFingerMom]

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Inspired by this: In the woods, returning from, let's
say "chores", I was lost deep in thought (Space?) and
when I looked up, coming off of auto-pilot and once
again fully aware of my surroundings, I found myself
smack-dab in the middle of a herd of about 15-20
grazing deer (I am shhh-quiet in the woods).
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It was actually the Alpha buck who raised his head
suddenly and stared at me for about 10-15 seconds
until (I like to think) he realized that I meant him
and his, no harm... at which point he lowered his head
and continued feeding.
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MAGICAL moment, indeed.
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UNDER SURVEILLANCE
WHILE TENDING A REMOTE FIELD
OF MARIJUANA
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Frozen Autumn doe
feigns invisibility.
Inhales my spirit.
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[CaliforniaPeggy]

1. My dear MiddleFingerMom!

Wow! That is wonderful...

I cannot do haiku, at all. I could not do it even if my life depended upon it.

Yours is really amazing...

And I love the story that accompanies it.

Have you seen my poem, Fog?

Do you write other than haiku?

Please post more!

:hi:

[MiddleFingerMom]

2. My dear CaliforniaPeggy!

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Thank you very much. I bet you COULD do haiku, if you
sat very still and didn't TRY to do it... perhaps for
quite a while. It's very much a zen thing for me. And
very rare.
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My poetry professor used to say that poetry is simply a
distillation of life. I think haiku just takes another
step -- a double distillation. It took me perhaps ten
times as long to write a little-bitty haiku than it did
a "normal" poem -- when I was able to write one at all.
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I used to write short stories, poetry (if I were independently
wealthy, I think "Poet" would be my trade) and, on rare and
wonderful occasions, haiku. The muse, she didn't whack me
upside the head often with those.
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Only one more that I remember. I was honored to have both
the previous haiku and this one below (an erotic piece) published
on a special rice-paper insert in a literary magazine many years
ago (the only poet of 15 to have two pieces included).
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Can you post "Fog"? I'd love to read it.
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AUTOEROTAIKU

Oyster, moist and warm.
Raw ocean's movement pulses.
Pearl glows with pleasure.
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LOL -- Spelchek suggests that perhaps "autoerotaiku" should be "autocratic".
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[CaliforniaPeggy]

3. Here it is: I lifted it from my thread down the page!

it rolls over the
hills the street the cars
billowing up against the
end of day

Visibility zero

Over my
shoulder
the sun
dances against the sky

but it is losing

the fog comes on
not stopping


the landscape
disappears
nothing looks
right

I know this street
but not

tonight

the fog has
taken it




© 2010 MLC


I must say your erotic haiku is wonderful too!

[MiddleFingerMom]

4. Phew!!!

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I spent a little time kicking myself after asking you
to post "Fog". Never woulda done it, but it's been
years and I forgot how much I tried to avoid it in the
past.
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You have no idea how much I cringe whenever I invite
somebody to show me their poetry -- most oftenest than
not it's filled with tired "but POWERFUL" cliches and
melodrama.
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Therefore, I'm uber-delighted when I receive a poem
as fine as "Fog". If this is a good indication of
your work, you have an ear and an eye for pacing that
I envy.
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And you got a TIGHT grip on the scruff o' the neck and
the seat o' the pants of the distillation part, too.
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How come yer so skeered a' haiku, huh?
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Shouldn't be.
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No way. No how.
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Nope.
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[CaliforniaPeggy]

5. Ah, you are WAY too kind!

But thank you...

I am blushing...

I really enjoy writing free verse, and haiku is about as far from that as you can get. In my only poetry class (so far), I loathed and dreaded writing sonnets. I did write one, but badly, I assure you.

When I'm faced with the dreaded rule for writing something, I run as far away as possible...

Honestly, I thank you.

To see more of my work, check out my Journal. I normally put whatever poetry I've posted in there...