My new poem: 7 a.m.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

the sun’s coming up over
an odd angle
funny I never saw
how still the air is
even the morning birdsong
the trees hang without purpose
why am I

awake too soon



© 2010 MLC

[Prisoner_Number_Six]

1. I've been going through that a lot lately.

Well said. :headbang:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

2. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six!

I'm really glad to see you tonight, and not just because you've rescued my poor poem!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Your criticism means a lot to me...

And I'm sorry you're going through that too...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

[Callalily]

3. So few words, but what

a great impact they make!

Mornings . . . *sigh*

[CaliforniaPeggy]

7. Thank you, my dear Callalily!

This is what I always try for: maximum impact with as few words as possible...

Glad you enjoyed!

[AsahinaKimi]

4. Great one Peggy..

My question, why am I still up? ..its 4:29am.. Will I ever sleep?

[CaliforniaPeggy]

8. My dear AsahinaKimi...

I am sorry you're having so much trouble sleeping...

But I am glad my poem struck a chord with you!

Thank you.

[BlueIris]

5. Slow clap. nt

[CaliforniaPeggy]

9. I thank you, my dear BlueIris...nt

[In_The_Wind]

6. I wake before the dawn.

all is dark, all is silent
I also awaken too soon
asking ... why

[CaliforniaPeggy]

10. My dear In_The_Wind!

I thank you for your contribution today, my dear Joanie!

:hi:

[MiddleFingerMom]

11. My dear CaliforniaPeggy.

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I too, like this one... and it definitely struck a chord with me -- I am ALWAYS
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It IS compact... which usually makes for a more striking poem.
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One of my favorite-ever poems was about as compact as you can get -- about
the poem-writing process itself, written by a college student in Pennsylvania. I was
still smoking at the time, so this REALLY resonated with me and my own experiences
as, during my own writing/smoking phase, I was sometimes smoking the next cigarette
long BEFORE I had put out the current one.
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Fire in my brain...
Volcano in my ashtray.
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[CaliforniaPeggy]

13. My dear MiddleFingerMom!

I'm always looking for ways to say more with less...

Thank you...I'm glad you like this.

And I LOVE your example of compact poetry!

More with less, indeed...

[nolabear]

12. Do you know about the 3:15 Project, Peggy?

I don't know if it's still going on but I participated for a few years, along with poets from all over the world. For the entire month of August, you set your alarm for 3:15 am and write whatever poetry comes to you, for as long as you care to, and then go back to sleep. It was interesting to think that many people in your time zone were at that moment doing the same thing, and that people all over the world were as well. I expect you can still find the 3:15 Project online and some poems that came out of it.

The newer iteration is the Poetry Postcard Project, wherein you buy 31 postcards, sign up with your name and address onto a list, and every day you write a poem and mail it to the next person on the list. Often people write the poem off of the last one they received from someone, or the image on the card. At month's end you have written 31 poems and received 31 poems on cards from all over. There's a site for that as well.

Stuff like this can be great starter material for the muse.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

14. My dear nolabear...

Thank you for telling me about these. I think I would not have done well with the 3:15 one, lol! I suspect my poems would mostly have been about why in hell was I up at that God-forsaken hour!

But the postcard project...I could do that. I will google it and see if it's still going.

Thanks for your good thoughts!

[cwydro]

15. Huh!

You wrote that one for me!

I mean you didn't, but it could be...if you get me.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

16. My dear cwydro...

Well, I didn't write it for you, exactly...

But that's the beauty of any writing, poetry or prose. Sometimes we read something that resonates for us, and it seems as though it was written for us...

I'm glad you felt this one.

And you know that I get you...

[theNotoriousP.I.G.]

17. This one is painful for me Peg

hits close to home. I've been battling insomnia for the last week. I'm awake way before 7:00 am, like 2 or 3 in the morning and I can't sleep for the life of me. I get up and have a smoke on the balcony and the silence is eerie, only dueling Hedgehogs hissing in the grass.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

19. My dear Notorious...

I'm sorry, sweetie...

You've had too much sorrow this year, and I would never want to contribute to it in any way...

This line is very poetic:

the silence is eerie, only dueling Hedgehogs hissing in the grass.


:hug:

[theNotoriousP.I.G.]

27. No Peggy!

You didn't say anything to add to my pain...I just really felt something with this poem because of my own situation/sleep deprivation.

:hug:

[alarimer]

18. Very good.

I can identify, not being a morning person.

Several times a week I have to be up way before the sun and I watch the sun rise, something I would rather not do!

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. I thank you, my dear alarimer...

When I still had to go to work, I too had to be up before sunrise, and I hated it...

Even now, I occasionally still get up then. NO idea why...

I'm glad you enjoyed my work!

[applegrove]

21. I used to work at 5AM. For sure the air was still at that time. And everything else. I found it

really, really peaceful to be up then. Thanks for the reminder.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

22. My dear applegrove...

I'm glad it was a good reminder for you...

Yes, the stillness is a hallmark of that time of day...

I DO like that...just not the having to be up then.

Thanks for your comments.

[Systematic Chaos]

23. My favorite time of the day has always been

25 or 6 to 7.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

24. My dear Systemic Chaos...

25? As in 1 a.m.?

Hmmm...

You sound like a morning lark...

More power to you!

[MiddleFingerMom]

25. Didn't you get the memo?

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[CaliforniaPeggy]

26. My name must not have been on that distribution list!

Too funny, my dear MiddleFingerMom!

:rofl: