Can someone please help me?

[DemGirl7]

Ok, I'm not an spelling ace or that good in punctuation, so can someone plese tell me if this following letter has any problems in it.

Dear Senator:

As a conserned citizen of this country, I am requesting for your support of Representative Conyers in his investigation of election fraud in Ohio.

The proof of voter suppression, inequality in distribution of voting machines, machine malfunctions, and purposeful fraud I have read about, has shaken my confidence in the outcome of the election.

And as a citizen of this great country, I therefore impore you to honor your duty as Senator of the United States to defend and protect our Constitution, by not accepting the vote of the illegal electors for President and Vice President of the United States with Representative Conyers on Jauary 6th.

Sincerely,

First and Last name
Poughkeepsie, New York

[Spinzonner]

1. conCerned

[kaitykaity]

2. It's not really a good idea to publish your

name on these boards.

FReepers have been known to target us where we live.
There was a woman who reported the Bush twins for underage
drinking and the FReeps published her full name and address]
and phone number and everything and advocated violence
against her.

[molly]

14. Yep - whatever happened to the guy that lost his job

because they outted him? He posted here and then nothing.

[TexasChick]

3. How 'bout

I am requesting for your support

I am requesting your support.




Edited for wrong HTML code.

[The Velveteen Ocelot]

4. Good letter.

A couple of typos: should be "concerned" in the first line, and "implore" in the 5th line.

[New Earth]

5. also

you have 'Jauary 6th'

it should be JaNuary

[bobbieinok]

6. some I see

--I am requesting for your support

either: I am asking for OR I am requesting ...your support

--about, has

no comma

--Constitution, by

no comma

[Wonk]

7. Three quick suggestions: Try using the DU spell check feature, and

you might want to edit your name out of your post, as you never know who may be lurking and reading here.

Two words that jump out at me immediately are concerned and January, for example.

You can also remove the word And from the beginning of your final paragraph, as well.

[buzzard]

8. Hope this helps I'm not a writer myself but a few changes.

OK, I'm not an spelling ace or that good in punctuation, so can someone please tell me if this following letter has any problems in it.

Dear Senator:

As a concerned citizen of this country, I am requesting your support of Representative Conyers in his investigation of election fraud in Ohio.

The proof of voter suppression, inequality in distribution of voting machines, machine malfunctions, and purposeful fraud I have read about, has shaken my confidence in the outcome of the election.

As a citizen of this great country, I implore you to honor your duty as Senator of the United States to defend and protect our Constitution, by not accepting the vote of the illegal electors for President and Vice President of the United States. Please stand with Representative Conyers on January 6th.

Sincerely,

Nicole Loeser
Poughkeepsie, New York

[buzzard]

10. oops meant

Please stand with Representative Conyers on January 6th to contest the Ohio electoral Vote.

[gristy]

9. That's a very good letter

I took out a couple commas, and some other housekeeping...

Dear Senator:

As a concerned citizen of this country, I am requesting your support of Representative Conyers in his investigation of election fraud in Ohio.

The proof of voter suppression, inequality in distribution of voting machines, machine malfunctions, and purposeful fraud I have read about has shaken my confidence in the outcome of the election.

And as a citizen of this great country, I therefore implore you to honor your duty as Senator of the United States to defend and protect our Constitution by joining Representative Conyers and not accepting the vote of the illegal electors for President and Vice President of the United States on January 6th.

[bush_is_wacko]

11. January is missing it's "n."

"with Representative Conyers on Jauary 6th."

I hope that's not your real name. These people are right, it's not a good idea to post it.

[naryaquid]

12. ...Let me go over it with my dictionary in hand:

Dear Senator:

As a concerned ..........(all o.k.)....

The incidence of voter suppression, inequities in the distribution of.....

As a citizen of this great country, I therefore imPLore you.....by CONTESTING the vote of the illegal electors......

*This seems about right.

[Name removed]

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[Liberty Belle]

15. Good letter! Fix typo: implore, not impore.

[DemGirl7]

16. Thanks for the tips...

I just efaxed some senators...I'm proud of myself.

[berniew1]

17. You might consider adding some URLs with documentation

Documentation for Ohio is at: http://www.freepress.org/departments/display/19

and http://northnet.org/minstrel/alpage.htm

Documentation of the widespread Florida and New Mexico vote machine fraud and suppression is at: http://www.flcv.com/fraudpat.html

[corbett]

18. 3 Quick Changes

Solid, succinct letter! Kudos for posting it here first!

1) Remove "for" in first sentence after comma;

2) Change "purposeful" to "deliberate" in middle of second sentence; and

3) "Implore" is missing an l after comma in third sentence.