Great at spelling, suck at punctuation...help me with this quote:

[WillParkinson]

We have "Gay" checks. We're allowed to put our own messages on them. Our message will read: If you take gay money but deny gay rights, you're a hypocrite.

But I want to ensure the punctuation on the quote is right. :-)

[eyesroll]

1. You're good.

:thumbsup:

[gristy]

2. looks good to me

and I'm a punctuation nazi!

[WannaJumpMyScooter]

3. I think you have it

I thought of several variations, but yours is shortest.

[msongs]

4. try saying "and" instead of "but" nt

[leftyclimber]

7. Second vote for "and".

It's stronger.

[But....]

10. Definitely...

andB-)

[jimshoes]

5. I think you've got it.

Not an expert but it seems fine to me.

[WannaJumpMyScooter]

6. Or you could say

This money came from a gay person. Spend it if you dare.

[Sal Minella]

8. The punctuation is good as it stands, but rewriting is possible:

"We have equality in the marketplace; we want equality in law."

"Accepting our money while rejecting our rights = Hypocrisy"

[bluedawg12]

9. How about?

"I'm as queer as a three dollar bill and this check won't bounce!"

OK, seriously, your quote, add "and."

[VPStoltz]

11. You might consider a - before the last clause.

Only because it's sort "in" right now to use the -.