Tom Yossarian Joad
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:19 AM
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It's time to go to bed, my child |
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Edited on Wed Aug-02-06 12:31 AM by Tom Yossarian Joad
and rest your so sweet head.
It's time to go to bed, my child, and pray the bombs don't fall.
It's time to go to bed, my child, And don't think of your Father
Who you saw in pieces as they carried you
To pour saline on your burns.
It's time to go to bed, my child and try so not to worry
that the world will explode again like it did last night,
It's time to go to bed, my child we will find another place.
To live
and think of pretty ponies and flowers on the lawn and school and fun and laughter
if God deems it so.
It's time to go to sleep, my child, I wish I knew you more.
TYJ
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:30 AM
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1. Oh,I'm sleeping alread...zzzzzz... |
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:32 AM
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:35 AM
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3. Kicked for a major rewrite that chages the tone. n/t |
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:36 AM
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4. You need to consider publishing some of these. |
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This one was like an injection of ice water right into my veins.
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:39 AM
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5. Thanks. I just re-read the final and broke out in tears myself... |
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didn't happen while writing it. odd.
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Wed Aug-02-06 12:55 AM
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6. I wondered about that.... |
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I usually don't post much...I was the first to recommend, and just moved on in tears...and then noted the edit as I had to come back to reread....Wondered how one could write such poetry through the tears....Reality is ugly...yet your poem is beautiful...
peace~
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Wed Aug-02-06 06:43 AM
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