OK-rough draft of my Veterans Day editorial...Help!

[w8liftinglady]

As always,help with spelling,grammar and content.thanks!


Veterans Day is November 11,2010.
There are currently 23 million veterans in the United States. This can be broken down as follows:
Number of Vietnam-era veterans in 2008 - 7.8 million(1964-1975); Gulf War One and Two veterans- 5.2 million(Aug. 2, 1990, to present); World War II veterans-2.6 million (1941-1945); Korean War veterans - 2.8 million (1950-1953); and 6 million peacetime veterans.

Many organizations exist to support veterans. The following are proven successes that allow direct volunteer involvement from a grateful nation.

1. The Wounded Warrior Project

http://www.woundedwarriorproject.org/content/view/543/907

The purpose of The Wounded Warrior project is 1.To raise awareness and enlist the public’s aid for the needs of injured service members
2.To help injured service members aid and assist each other.
3.To provide unique, direct programs and services to meet the needs of injured service members

There are many diverse volunteer opportunities associated with this organization.

2.The National Coalition for Homeless Veterans

http://www.nchv.org/howtohelp.cfm

The NCHV "is the resource and technical assistance center for a national network of community-based service providers and local, state and federal agencies that provide emergency and supportive housing, food, health services, job training and placement assistance, legal aid and case management support for hundreds of thousands of homeless veterans each year."
There are a multitude of ways to volunteer with NCHV,both on a local and national level-emergency shelters,Stand Down programs,mentor and counselor volunteers.

3.Disabled Veterans of America

http://www.dav.org/volunteers/Default.aspx

Through the DAV,you may volunteer to drive veterans to VA services,become a volunteer at veterans centers,as well as other local volunteers opportunities.

4.The VA Voluntary Service Organization

http://www.volunteer.va.gov/index.asp

There are a multitude of ways to volunteer both through The Veterans administration and through The United We Serve initiative.A VA representative will contact you and let you know about things you can do in our area after you have completed the volunteer form.

5.Give An Hour

https://www.giveanhour.org/skins/gah/home.aspx

This organization provides free mental health services to veteran/active duty personnel from the Gulf Wars.There is an enormous amount of volunteer openings for professionals and others who would like to help.

As a grateful nation,we should show our gratitude with more than kind words.I challenge all who can to volunteer an hour a week to support our veterans.It is the least we can do for ALL our veterans.

[w8liftinglady]

1. In the midst of my personal pity party,I DO need some help....

my confidence is low,but this needs to be printed this week.

[lunatica]

2. Since you're basically making lists why not just make bullet points

They'll be very easy to understand if you separate each number so that it'll be visually easy to read and the impact will be far greater than trying to put each point in the same paragraph with another point.

For example on your first paragraph the following format is much easier to read and understand:

There are currently 23 million veterans in the United States. This can be broken down as follows:

Vietnam-era veterans in 2008 - 7.8 million(1964-1975)

Gulf War One and Two veterans- 5.2 million(Aug. 2, 1990, to present)

World War II veterans-2.6 million (1941-1945)

Korean War veterans - 2.8 million (1950-1953)

and 6 million peacetime veterans.

then emphasize the total number again.

You can, of course write your opinion in paragraphs to break up the lists.

That's my two cents worth because this way makes it easier for me to digest and comprehend since you're basically making lists.

[w8liftinglady]

3. Thanks-That IS easier to read

[w8liftinglady]

4. updated

Veterans Day is November 11,2010.
There are currently 23 million veterans in the United States.This can be broken down as follows:
Vietnam-era veterans (1964-1975) - 7.8 million
Gulf War One and Two veterans(Aug.2,1990-present)- 5.2 million
World War II veterans-2.6 million (1941-1945);
Korean War veterans - 2.8 million (1950-1953);
Peacetime veterans-6 million

Many organizations exist to support veterans.As this is the Twenty-first century,most have online resources and contact numbers.The following are proven successes that allow direct volunteer involvement from a grateful nation.

1. The Wounded Warrior Project

http://www.woundedwarriorproject.org/content/view/543/907

The purpose of The Wounded Warrior project is
1-To raise awareness and enlist the public’s aid for the needs of injured service members.
2-To help injured service members aid and assist each other.
3-To provide unique, direct programs and services to meet the needs of injured service members

There are many diverse volunteer opportunities.

2.The National Coalition for Homeless Veterans

http://www.nchv.org/howtohelp.cfm

The NCHV "is the resource and technical assistance center for a national network of community-based service providers and local, state and federal agencies that provide emergency and supportive housing, food, health services, job training and placement assistance, legal aid and case management support for hundreds of thousands of homeless veterans each year."
There are a multitude of ways to volunteer with NCHV,both on a local and national level-emergency shelters,Stand Down programs,mentor and counselor volunteers.

3.Disabled Veterans of America

http://www.dav.org/volunteers/Default.aspx

Through them,you may volunteer to drive Veterans to VA services,become a volunteer at veterans centers,as well as other local volunteers opportunites.

4.The VA Voluntary Service Organization

http://www.volunteer.va.gov/index.asp

There are a multitude of ways to volunteer both through The Veterans Administration and through The United We Serve initiative.A VA representative will contact you and let you know about things you can do in our area after you have completed the volunteer form.

5.Give An Hour

https://www.giveanhour.org/skins/gah/home.aspx

This organization provides free mental health services to veteran/active duty personnel from the Gulf Wars.There is an enormous amount of volunteer openings for professionals and others who would like to help.

As a grateful nation,we should show our gratitude with more than kind words.I challenge all who can to volunteer an hour a week to support our veterans.It is the least we can do for ALL our veterans.

[lunatica]

5. this is much easier to read and there's no eye strain or confusion

There's plenty of white space where there's no print which is necessary to give the eyes a break.

I think you could expound a little more in your paragraphs. Tell would be volunteers how easy it is to give of their time, and include a little about how hard it is for the vets and what a difference a little attention means to their well being. Talk about how volunteers are needed for vets who can't make it to the help they need without volunteers there to help. Tell them that even one hour a month makes a difference. Volunteers are more apt to volunteer when they feel warmth towards the cause. Passion is good. Volunteers are full of passion. I know many who actively seek something to fight for when they don't personally have 'a cause'.

People love volunteering for things that they know are important and that make a difference. You'll get people that will find their cause.

Oh! And you're wonderful!

[w8liftinglady]

6. That is a great idea-I'll conclude with something along those lines

I'll post soon

[w8liftinglady]

7. sort of like this?

Veterans Day is November 11,2010.
There are currently 23 million veterans in the United States.This can be broken down as follows:
Vietnam-era veterans (1964-1975) - 7.8 million
Gulf War One and Two veterans(Aug.2,1990-present)- 5.2 million
World War II veterans-2.6 million (1941-1945);
Korean War veterans - 2.8 million (1950-1953);
Peacetime veterans-6 million

Many organizations exist to support veterans.As this is the Twenty-first century,most have online resources and contact numbers.The following are proven successes that allow direct volunteer involvement from a grateful nation.

1. The Wounded Warrior Project

http://www.woundedwarriorproject.org/content/view/543/907

The purpose of The Wounded Warrior project is
1-To raise awareness and enlist the public’s aid for the needs of injured service members.
2-To help injured service members aid and assist each other.
3-To provide unique, direct programs and services to meet the needs of injured service members

There are many diverse volunteer opportunities.

2.The National Coalition for Homeless Veterans

http://www.nchv.org/howtohelp.cfm

The NCHV "is the resource and technical assistance center for a national network of community-based service providers and local, state and federal agencies that provide emergency and supportive housing, food, health services, job training and placement assistance, legal aid and case management support for hundreds of thousands of homeless veterans each year."
There are a multitude of ways to volunteer with NCHV,both on a local and national level-emergency shelters,Stand Down programs,mentor and counselor volunteers.

3.Disabled Veterans of America

http://www.dav.org/volunteers/Default.aspx

Through them,you may volunteer to drive Veterans to VA services,become a volunteer at veterans centers,as well as other local volunteers opportunites.

4.The VA Voluntary Service Organization

http://www.volunteer.va.gov/index.asp

There are a multitude of ways to volunteer both through The Veterans Administration and through The United We Serve initiative.A VA representative will contact you and let you know about things you can do in our area after you have completed the volunteer form.

5.Give An Hour

https://www.giveanhour.org/skins/gah/home.aspx

This organization provides free mental health services to veteran/active duty personnel from the Gulf Wars.There is an enormous amount of volunteer openings for professionals and others who would like to help.

As a grateful nation,we should show our gratitude with more than kind words.Many veterans need help getting to appointments,filling out forms,building adaptations,finding safe housing...and someone to talk to.Their families can use support as well.I challenge all who can to volunteer an hour a week to support our veterans.It is the least we can do for ALL our veterans.

[lunatica]

9. If you put a space after every comma and two spaces after the periods it'll

look perfect.

Your last paragraph looks like this"

As a grateful nation,we should show our gratitude with more than kind words.Many veterans need help getting to appointments,filling out forms,building adaptations,finding safe housing...and someone to talk to.Their families can use support as well.I challenge all who can to volunteer an hour a week to support our veterans.It is the least we can do for ALL our veterans.

If you put spaces after commas and periods it'll look like this:

As a grateful nation, we should show our gratitude with more than kind words. Many veterans need help getting to appointments, filling out forms, building adaptations, finding safe housing, and someone to talk to. Their families can use support as well. I challenge all who can to volunteer an hour a week to support our veterans. It is the least we can do for ALL our veterans.

[Obamanaut]

8. Spaces after comma, period, etc. nt