Why Africa is So Messed Up (And why it matters)

[Ravajava]

Something to consider.

Would you kindly subsribe to my YouTube channel?

What, no bioshock fans around?

[WhoIsNumberNone]

1. Very informative, but very bad delivery

After about 10 minutes it just sounds like rambling- try working from a script. Many vloggers do.

[Ravajava]

2. Hmm...

The only danger I see in that is that it would come off as a structured, rehearsed lecture. That's not to say I stood up without a plan and an outline, but I digress. I don't know, this is the style I want. The character I portray on camera is supposed to be a more scatterbrained version of myself, because I find it more entertaining.

Of course, I will take your criticism into consideration and try doing a video that has a written script. Who knows, it may be both more entertaining and informative.

[earthshine]

3. Rank amateur

Whereas I started to find the info interesting, you lost the points with strange attempts at humor.

Watching you drink is ridiculous ... the sound of it is rather disgusting.

I turned it off after a few minutes.

You should rethink your online persona.

Other than that, there is some potential here.

[Ravajava]

5. Duly noted

Alright, no more tea next time.

I'll try and be more to the point as well.

[suzanner]

4. 'Fireside chat' theme would be better sitting down and collected, but...

I appreciate the perspective and information, otherwise agree with other commenters that is needs more... polish? Don't get discouraged- work in progress 'n' all.

[Ravajava]

7. Thanks for the comment

Then that's the way I'll go with it.

[erpowers]

8. A Few Thoughts

Your information was very interesting. However, your presentation could be better. First, You should consider giving your presentation without drinking tea, or anything else, during the presentation.

Second, maybe you should try to get your thought together before you start your presentation. I know you claimed you wanted to put forward a scatter brained persona, but some people may not be willing to watch your full presentation because of the seemingly scattered thoughts. Maybe you could even record yourself, watch yourself, take notes, and then record your presentation a second time.