Help with Resume.

[Locut0s]

I'm going to be submitting my resume to a number of places looking for a simple retail stocking type job. That or a sales clerk type position. Given this position how does the following resume look to you? Any suggestions on things you would change?

[Locut0s]

2. Thanks! That does look better. nt

[snagglepuss]

4. Include descriptive words like flexible, creative, reliable, respectful, proactive

You are underselling your abilities, for instance, according to your resume you displayed merchandise which requires an ability to create an attractive display i.e. creativity.

[Locut0s]

5. UPDATED

Does this now look overkill for this kind of job though? Remember I'm just looking for a clerk or even stocking type job.

[Massacure]

6. A few thoughts,

1) I like how you back up your statement about being an "independent learner" by mentioning it only took you a couple of days to learn the POS system.

2) I don't feel "Stocking, facing, proper product display, and advertisement" flows well between those two other sentences. You might want to consider reworking that.

3) Having worked retail, I know POS means Point of Sale. Can you assume that the recruiter which is trying to fill the position you are applying to knows this though?

4) How do you define "successful seller" on your third bullet under skills? Did that product sell $20,000 its first year? $50,000? $100,000. You have an opportunity to make the recruiter go "Wow!" here.

5) Your first paragraph under Professional Experience doesn't tell the recruiter anything about why they should bring you in for an interview.

6) I would rework your second bullet in your second paragraph in Profession Experience: "Highly successful -- regularly met sales targets in an environment that required independence and multitasking skills."

7) The third bullet in the second paragraph of Professional Experience -- aren't you duplicating what you said as your first point in Skills? Also, how quick is quickly? Did you train new employees after a month? Three months? Six months?

8) Under the Assistant Manager gig -- isn't being "fully competent" a minimum job requirement?

9) Under the Assistant Manager gig -- don't your first and second bullets basically say the same thing?

10) Again, with the Assistant Manager gig -- You only list a job description. Doesn't everybody in that role do cash reports? Doesn't everybody in that role do scheduling? You were at 7-11 for almost three years. Did you just auto-pilot through those three years or did you accomplish something? I would almost argue that the bit about the Asian foods would go well here, but if you can list a hard figure you want that to be one of the first things the recruiters sees so that you can make them go "Wow!" I don't the way you have it serves you as well as it could, but I'm not sure how I would go about improving it.

[Locut0s]

10. Thanks for the suggestions!

I've added a few more specifics and changed things a bit more in the 2nd update I posted. Some of the numbers I don't remember any more though and don't want to just make them up. I'm happy with the way it's looking now.

[hack89]

7. You need to be more specific

Type of retail environment, specific types of POS

In the accomplishments section add specific $$$ amounts for sales targets or accounts managed. Add specific numbers of people managed or trained.


Highlight those areas where you made a positive impact - "just being there" comments are useless.

[Chan790]

8. Numbers.

"Show, don't tell" as they say in creative writing. It applies to all fields though. Recruiters love numbers and data, they're quantifiable and they tell them that you know that the numbers are important.

Don't say "Met Sales targets", say "Met sales-target of $500/week" or "Met targeted sales goals of $1,000 & 40 units." or "Made $18000 in sales, 226% of quarterly goal." That tells me something about your performance. "Met sales goal" tells me nothing really. Were the goals reachers or easy lay-ups? Did you just clear them or did you annihilate them?

[Locut0s]

9. UPDATE 2

Made a few more small changes. Thanks for the suggestions all!

[Nikia]

11. No offenese, but do you need this to get a sales clerk or stocking position?

I know that jobs are harder to come by, but I did not realize that professional resumes were now necessary for those positions.
Also reading your resume, I thought that maybe you should aim a little higher, whether it is in retail management, sales with higher salary potential, banking, inventory control, etc. Maybe you have tried to get into the fields before without much luck. Maybe you have other reasons. Don't sell yourself short though.