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lillypaddle

(9,580 posts)
Fri Jul 16, 2021, 04:10 PM Jul 2021

My first (and last) attempt at a sonnet

Sonnet

Be still heart! A wise and patient brain
I need to contemplate and wait.
The seconds pass as hours, counting out my fate.
Oh, my hand to gently stroke your cheek again!
Love, a silken cloth I weave from out my pain.
Be silent soul! Your pounding must eventually abate.
Calm will surely reach me on a not to distant date.
The sky is filled with heavy clouds that thunder down the rain
mingling with soft wetness upon my tearful face.
My spirit seems to break at last the silence of my woe
in earnestness I search to find a way from my disgrace
to finally see that I must linger not – but go
half running through the streets to some unfamiliar place
and learn to speak forgivingly to myself, the answer “no.”

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My first (and last) attempt at a sonnet (Original Post) lillypaddle Jul 2021 OP
Well done! SheltieLover Jul 2021 #1
Thanks lillypaddle Jul 2021 #2
Yes! Champp Jul 2021 #3
Last? I hope not. Harker Jul 2021 #4
Man, it was like pulling my own teeth lillypaddle Jul 2021 #5
I have a couple that need to go. Harker Jul 2021 #6
Winter was easy lillypaddle Jul 2021 #7

Harker

(14,012 posts)
6. I have a couple that need to go.
Fri Jul 23, 2021, 04:27 PM
Jul 2021

Teeth, that is, not sonnets.

I'm sorry that your art is painful to create. "Winter" didn't come easily, either, I'd venture.

lillypaddle

(9,580 posts)
7. Winter was easy
Sat Jul 24, 2021, 12:49 AM
Jul 2021

the sonnet was hard because of form, and how it flows (or doesn't!). It is very structured, I'm better with free flowing poetry.

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