Reply #17: Extraordinary work, and accurate in describing the naivete [View All]

[truth2power]

and infantilism of the American populace, generally. " The nation seethes with cranky, overgrown babies who kill." That about nails it, I think. This American Exceptionalism thing has got to go.

In terms of the mechanics of this article, which some have commented on, I guess I'll add my $.02. I think what you're striving for is a literary conceit, a kind of extended metaphor which would work well if the text were tightened up a bit, re-wording some of the more convoluted sentences.

In that regard, one should keep in mind that the finished product on the shelf at Border's is the result of working and reworking by professional editors, in collaboration with the author. And even then, the reader can encounter quite glaring errors.

Your premise is sound. Keep on keepin' on.