Reply #102: I'd leave out the third paragraph. [View All]

[RevCheesehead]

Let the reader make that decision - I wouldn't hand it to her. It sounds too much like an ultimatum (and we are supposedly welcoming and inclusive, right?)

The other thing which strikes me about that paragraph is that it sounds like the writer is making decisions about the Dem. platform. That just isn't done on the local level.

You MIGHT want to state something like "both Democrats and Republicans have strong feelings about this issue, and neither party is in complete agreement about homosexuality, gay rights, and civil liberties for all Americans."

The first two paragraphs are strong. They could stand alone.